Genre: LGBT+, slice of life, MM Romance (Sorry I couldn't get the flair to work.) This is the Prologue to my story, a prologue I added after two beta readings. So it may not be as refined as the rest of the book that has had revisions over the span of two years. This is the first prologue I've ever written… I never saw a need for them with my other stories. But I'm not a professional writer, so I've never written with an audience in mind lol so many new experiences! False Bravado>Nerves—just barely😅
Some Sidenotes: There is a glossary in this book, however I did not include it here...word count issues lol I hope the way it's written will portray meanings enough without access to the glossary 🤞
I didn't include a blurb... I'm still struggling with that, so I'm saving it for another day...here's a sentence instead: "Welcome to YaoiYakuzaLand" lol if that doesn't prepare you or mean anything to you, that's ok and I won't fault you if you quit reading half way😅
TIA for taking the time to do a critique!
Possession Prologue: https://docs.google.com/document/d/1E-4Q8A-SGJJGjk9Wm850Kvd6nyZPeumAxmbJGXu4kN4/edit?usp=drivesdk
[3055] Genoese Tale Critique: https://www.reddit.com/r/DestructiveReaders/comments/133n10j/comment/jiesfkn/
I hope I did the 1:1 ratio well🤞
Hi Y'all! Really excited to submit the second draft of my story. In this draft the sort of twist is revealed, setting the stage for the rest of the story.
I did my best to implement many of the changes suggested, including rewriting the first part to be (hopefully) less boring and explain the character's struggles more. Most of the other parts are more or less the same.
I'm not really looking for any specific feedback at the moment, just want to hear people's general impressions and what is and isn't working in the story so far. I care about all my stories, but I connect to this one on a personal level so I really want to make it as good as possible. So all feedback is welcome. The good, the bad, and the ugly.
My story:
https://docs.google.com/document/d/1EOiaKkGwrHPEL5pBNXVoOwJeKzB_-Y1hSKH-9qWHbAc/edit
Receipts:
[2296] Apricots
link:
Link to the chapter: critique me please!
Hi there! A very novice writer here - my first story in fact - but have a big fascination for medieval economic history and wanted to write a historically accurate novel about the life of a Genoese merchant captain and his crew. I piece together information from many different papers and books to to try and create an immersive story that is true to history, including the use of historical characters, places, etc.
Would greatly appreciate your honest critiques on whatever you feel as this is very much a learning process for me.
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